W.K 22 The mystery door by Dylan H.

As me and my cousin were getting ready to go to my Nana’s house, we packed our bags and walked out to the car. While the car journey went on, me and my cousin said wait a minute I didn’t tell you my cousin’s name. It’s Jerry and my name is Dylan. Ok, carry on. So we played clash of clans, Fortnite and Spyro and at the end I read a few pages of the ice monster. When we eventually got to my Nana’s house we ate dinner and we went on an adventure [by the way she lives in the countryside]. We walked down the road and saw a house. We walked up to the door and opened the door. It was abandoned. We walked in further and saw the door but this time is was much much bigger with a coded lock. TO BE CONTINUED…. 

One thought on “W.K 22 The mystery door by Dylan H.”

  1. Dylan

    I like how you made the “to be continued” I think it adds a lot of suspense to the story and when you did
    ” wait a minute I didn’t tell you my cousin’s name. It’s Jerry and my name is Dylan” it was very funny. One thing you could work on or change is instead of having “by the way she lives on the countryside” you could put that in a different sentence like we got to my nana’s house on the countryside. But you did an awesome job keep it up!!!

    -Aiden in Illinois

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