Week 30 Amazing Amusement by Aidan

‘This is going to be a great day’, I exclaimed, as I walked into Luna Park with my best friend Gerald. ‘What should we go on first?’ asked Gerald, with a smile on his face. ‘Hey Gerald I think we should go on the get out’, I said in a cringe worthy manner. I wondered why but Gerald just couldn’t stop laughing. After that, we ran up to the tsunami ride and watched it go spinning around and around. ‘Gerald do you want to go on that?’ I asked as I pointed towards it. ‘Yes what kind of question is that’, said Gerald as we walked onto the tsunami. This is going to be fun, I thought, as we walked on…

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  1. Hi Aidan,
    Well done on your 100WC. Did you know Luna Park is the name of an amusement park in Sydney? I never went when I visited Sydney but I am sure it has the kinds of rides you describe. You made good use of the prompt, although I would hate to go on a ride called Tsunami- it sounds sickening! As you can guess I am a bit scared of fairground rides. You used good language in your piece- exclaimed instead of said, using after that to open a new sentence and your speech punctuation is almost spot on, well done!
    Keep up the good work,
    Ciara (Team 100)

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